Wednesday 12 November 2014

Proof


                                                                               Photo prompt-copyright-Rochelle Wisoff-Fields



She stood still for some time; then she raised her finger and pointed towards the sky.
Everyone stopped and looked up. They could see nothing but deep blue sky.
She shrieked and started trembling, “Its happening. Yes, it’s happening.”
Everyone felt a scare. Everyone stood unsure of himself.
“There is something shinning in the sky, I see it over there,” said a girl. She was behind the woman who kept repeating, “It’s happening.”
One by one people started moving away; everyone appeared apprehensive; everyone expected something unseemly to happen.
The woman asked the girl, “Did I prove my point?”
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Word count 98

A post for Friday Fictioneers on a photo prompt

12 comments:

  1. I like the repetition in this. I'm not sure that the point is that she's proving, but I like it. (Do you need 'the' in front of 'woman' in the last line?
    Claire

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  2. thanks Claire for reading, you were right about 'the', i have edited the post

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  3. This reminds me of an "I Love Lucy" episode where she and Ethel distracted people in an art gallery by staring up at the ceiling and appearing to see something amazing while Ricky and Fred put back a painting. :-) It works and not just in your story (but maybe not for Lucy!)

    janet

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    1. thanks Janet, i feel great, nice you saw the point i was trying to make, thanks

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  4. Somehow there are places where there are more clothes than emperors.. and there are places where there is a big fuzz when neither are.

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  5. Dear IB.

    Love it. Mob mentality. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. thanks, feels nice when someone takes out time to read the post, i personally i am scared of mob mentality, it can have horrifying consequences

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  6. There will always be lemmings! Nice job of proving that point. ;-)

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    1. great you liked it and thanks, Dawn, for reading and commenting

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  7. Youbdo realisecthat some of us are going to try this now, don't you?

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